I had an interesting and challenging piece
of feedback from my editor during the week. She is currently doing the final
edit of Mine to Avenge and we are
down to the final few chapters where a lot of things are happening with
different characters at the same time in the move towards the story’s climax.
In Mine to Avenge, all of this particular action takes place in a large house
and the surrounding gardens, over the course of a single day, involving the
movements of and 4 key characters and 3 minor characters.
My editor told me that she thought that two
of the major events of that final day, were placed too close together for them to be able to
realistically occur within the written time frame. I had allowed 45 minutes
between both events, and on closer examination, I agreed with the editor and
thought that the timeframe might be a bit ‘tight’.
However, as all more experienced writers
out there will know, such a problem can’t be fixed by simply allocating a
longer timeframe, because other events with other characters have been written
already, and changing this one thing can have a roll-on effect with other
events, making it necessary to adjust their timeframes as well.
In my case, I had to closely assess 4
chapters concerned with the chain of events on the day of concern. Fortunately,
I found it not too complicated to sort out. The two events of concern happened
around midday, so all I had to do was to start the events of the day about an
hour earlier than they originally had done. This meant that I only had to
adjust the times for the events that took place prior to midday.
I don’t know how other writers keep tabs on
these things but in my case, I worked through this issue by designing what I
called a Time Map - see below (I have removed potential plot spoilers from the Time
Map and it won’t make much sense anyway without the story). I then went through
the four chapters of concern, writing down the movements of the characters
concerned at the time they happened, adjusting the times and movements prior to the
midday events. The completed map enabled me to see at a glance where all the
characters were at any given time for consistency. I found this a very useful
exercise and will use it again for future work involving
complicated character movement. I’m keen to know how other writers manage this
sort of thing.
Time
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Alethea
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Linus
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Spyridon
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Parker
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8.00
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Wakes, showers,
dresses
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8.15
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8.30
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Goes to courtyard
to smoke
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8.45
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(8.50) Phones
Linus
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Talking to
Alethea on phone (in foyer)
Goes outside when
Spyridon comes upon him
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(c. 8.52) Comes
in from courtyard
Sees Linus in
foyer (on phone to Alethea)
Goes to library
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9.00
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9.15
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Decides it’s time
to act
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9.30
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Passes kitchen -
housekeeper and manservant inside talking
To library
looking for Spyridon
Checks on
gardener
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In library
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9.45
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Sees housekeeper
taking food to Spyridon in library
Enters kitchen
for snack & to switch monitor off
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In library
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10.00
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Enters Spyridon’s
suite
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In library with
housekeeper
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10.15
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Leaves Spyridon’s
room, returns plate to kitchen
(Housekeeper
there)
Switches monitor
back on.
Back to own room
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10.30
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In his room
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10.45
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11.00
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Contacted by
Parker on intercom (still in library)
Goes to gatehouse
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Asks Spyridon to
join him at gatehouse
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11.15
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Garage scene -
Calls employees - tells them to leave immediately
Goes to ask
gardener to leave
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In garage with
Spyridon
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11.30
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In garden - Talks
to gardener
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Hiding in bushes
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11.45
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Waiting in
gatehouse with Parker for employees to leave
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Waiting in
gatehouse with Spyridon
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Noon
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Goes to window -
sees employees leaving
Changes clothes
Spyridon calls on
intercom - asks him to courtyard
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Calls Linus on
intercom
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12.15
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Meets Spyridon in
courtyard
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Meets Linus in
courtyard
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In lean-to
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12.30
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Back into house
and to his room
Looks out of
window to courtyard
Listens outside
suite from top of stairs (hears voices)
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Enters house with
Parker - near kitchen
To library to
wait for Linus to appear
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Enters house with
Spyridon - near kitchen
Goes to library
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12.45
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Waiting in
library - bound to chair
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Waiting in
library
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1.00
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Leaves his room
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1.15
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Arrives at
library
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Hiding behind
library door
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1.30
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Reveals the truth
to Linus
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1.45
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2.00pm
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Alethea arrives
at Spyridon’s house
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